…ilike that…. so let`s start it..
once upon time there were three little bees…neena ,noola and naano..they lived together in a beautifull home..every morning wakes up early and tring to bring the food..one day when they are about to live … hep me…help me!!!! they heard that little voice said… whose there? said noola….. and the voice return : im over here ..down the tree please can you help me?? im stuck.. noola said: what do you do to be stuck like that? …oh it1s along story but let me out of here and i will tell you ..is that alright with you said the spider..the bees said : fine mr spider we will going to help you..F:after they released him..he start to tell the story: thank you little bees..last night i were here buliding my house in a beatiful way untill i heard a loud voice said: help me help me!!! said to my self if i go now to help that one i will never finish this today..the voice last for a minute and stop…so when alittle work left in my house suddenly something hit my head and i fall dowen in some trees and my foot stuck!!! it`s hurt so much said the spider..
then after awhile a bird come by me and i saied in loud voice : please help me little bird!! help you hhhhhhh little bird said that… aminute ago i was who needs some help beacouse istuck in a tree just like and i saw you up…thought that you will help me but you didn`t…soo im not going to help you now untill you learn a lesson …then he went said mr spider..now im so sad..if i was helped him he would help me back.. now i learn the lesson that in any time i m going to help the other friends if thy were in trouble…wooow that is so great mr spider ..you know it is wrong not to help our friends and you do swear to help them..we are going to help you beacouse we learnd so..said the little bees… F
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so tell me your opinions my girls please ..should i move on or what…thank youF:
what a great story! i really liked it. It has a great lesson to learn.
I do think you should move on!!!!
your a good story teller!
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I liked it too
especially the bees’ names,,~
Yeaa ofcourse we will be so glad if u keep on telling us more and more stories dear
good lesson to learn
you should keep on writing
but be careful with some grammer mistakes
but as a starter its good
good luck
..im soo happy that i have all of you…cool girl ok i will be more carefull with grammer..and thanx again… but you need to develop your grammar and your expressions other than that your was nice and you are a good story teller..